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Take me to the desert
Where there’s got to be
A whole heap of nothing
For you and me
Take me to the desert
Take me to the sand
Show me the colour of your right hand.Love is a temple
Love is a shrine
Buy some love at the five and dime
A little bit of love
From the counter store
Get it on credit if you need some more.
I’ll the figure of your disgrace
A criss cross pattern upon your face
A woman’s just too tired to think
About the dirty old dishes in the kitchen sink.I wish I was invisible
So I could climb through the telephone
When it hurts my ear
And it hurts my brain
And it makes me feel too much
Too much too much too much.
Don’t cut me down
When I’m talking to you
’cause I’m much too tall
To feel that small.Love is a temple
Love is a shrine
Love is pure
And love is blind
Love is a religious sign
I’m gonna leave this love behind.
Love is hot and love is cold
I’ve been bought and I’ve been sold
Love is rock and love is roll
I just want someone to hold.surely once we make the desicion to post a peice of poetry we allow others the right to comment on that peice of work, no matter how personal it may be. we open ourselves up to criticism and others opinions and we have to accept good and bad comments from everyone.
like i said before i would rather someone be honest about my writing than pretend they liked it just to spare my feelings. how am i meant to grow as a writer if i get dishonest opinions all the time? it would be foolish of me to expect everyone to like every peice of work i produce. if someone wishes to rip my poetry apart then they are more than welcome to as long as it is done in a constructive manner and would eventually help me to improve the way i write.
well feel free to say what you like about my stuff, i promise i wont go and stick my head into a vat of acid. :wink: :lol:
i think poetry still has to be asthetically appealing, some poetry can be almost as bad as listening to fingernails on a chalkboard. just makes you wish youd never started to read it. i think you can criticise someone honestly and still be tactful about it. there is a difference to being constructive and personally attacking someones work i think.
i would rather someone be completely honest and say what they thought rather than tell me they really liked my work just to be nice. if no one criticises your work you dont know where you are going wrong. if you cant take criticism then you shouldnt allow your work to be published or seen. i am lucky i think my work is crap anyway so any postive comments are a bonus :lol:
Fave Authors Steven King, Clive Barker, Tolkein, Stephen Donaldson, Anne Mcaffery, Anne Rice, Edgar Allen Poe, Charles Dickens, Daphne Du Maurier.
Fave Books, any from the above mentioned, oh and more recently The Da Vinci Code.
Recommendations, i’d recommend The Chronicle of Thomas Covenant by Stephen Donaldson, a must read for any tolkein fans
Books to Film.. cant wait to see The Da Vinci Code when it is released, any of the Steven King adaptations have my vote, as does The Lord of The Rings.
:)I was born a child of grace
Nothing else about the place
Everything was ugly but your beautiful face
And it left me no illusionI saw you in the curve of the moon
In the shadow cast across my room
You heard me in my tune
When I just heard confusionAll because of you
All because of you
All because of you
I am… I amI like the sound of my own voice
I didn’t give anyone else a choice
An intellectual tortoise
Racing with your bullet trainSome people get squashed crossing the tracks
Some people got high rises on their backs
I’m not broke but you can see the cracks
You can make me perfect againAll because of you
All because of you
All because of you
I am… I amI’m alive
I’m being born
I just arrived, I’m at the door
Of the place I started out from
And I want back insideAll because of you
All because of you
All because of you
I amwith a stroke of charcoal she draws the outline
that strong black shape that will hold the colours
of her heartsmudging the canvas as she works
she adds a stroke here and a line there
building up the picturesmokey eyes gaze down at her
showing the tenderness within though
not yet brought to lifea flash of colour as she smooths on oils
the canvas begins to breathe and a
subtle heartbeat formslayer upon layer of paint is added
until gazing back at her is
an illustration of love:lol: :lol: needs more work see me after class. :wink:
right enough spamming on someones creative efforts. :)
observer, i wasnt aware that it was a creative writing exercise, as for me having egg on my face, not at all, a criticism is still a criticism regardless of the content. i think she has a talent, and personally i reckon she should give up the classes and just write from her soul, writing cannot be forced, it should flow naturally, it is the only way to develope your own sense of style and rythym. that of course is just my opinion tho. :D
and yes i am a she :wink: :lol:
