The fictitional Troll circle of life

janeylou wrote:

Mizzy Mizzed One Her Stomachs Like A Gone Off Scone

She Went With A Cyber Don And Now With Nemesis He has Gone

You Live Like A Pancake All Lost And Flat

You Are An Embarrasment Not So Fat

So You Bring Me All Your Mizz Mizzery

Your Life Is AScrounger And Your Free

So Jump On A Plane With No Brain

In Your Room ALONE With Your Cocaine

You Know Your One Black Dress

Makes You Look Such A Mess

Critique and explanation of your crappy attempt at poetry.

1. Stomach reference to me having surgery and it being damaged I imagine.

2. Yeah Nems dun take ma chat mayan, I couldn’t compete with her pics.

3. Pancake reference for my low moods when I cry a lot probably

4. Not so fat – make up your mind

5. I bring you nothing but misery yes I tend to do that with all the men I’ve ever dated.

6. I am free? true I don’t charge

7. I go away a lot hence reference to plane, I often have no brain that’s true I dated you

8. I don’t take cocaine so it was just a convenient rhyming word maybe if I did I’d be thinner

9. Actually I have 5 black dresses I threw away the red one as you liked me in it

10. I look like a mess – didn’t bother you before though did it sausage.

Thank you for the poem but you’re a much better troll than a poet.

Your = you’re

Embarrassment*

You don’t need to use sentence case,  a capital letter at the start is basically all you need.  Titles of places can have both the first words capitalised for example Camber Sands, Bogna Regis (like the places you go to when you go on ‘holiday’)

When you re-read what you’ve written put in commas for when you want the line to flow better, see it as a way to briefly pause,  and maybe use an exclamation mark to impress on you readers you are making a point for example:

He couldn’t stop trolling talking and obsessing over her she’s such a fat cow

to

He couldn’t stop trolling talking and obsessing over her, she’s such a fat cow!

Or even

He couldn’t stop trolling talking and obsessing over her – she’s such a fat cow.

Oh and when you wish to take the mickey out of someone you could use these ‘ ‘ ‘.

For example:

He say’s he’s ‘over’ me but keeps talking about me, commenting on my threads and has even written a ‘poem’ about me.

That’s me basically saying I didn’t think that it was much of a poem.

You don’t have to be smart to ‘write’ – you have proved that!  I hope my few tips have helped you.  Lets see some progress if you try again!

I don’t actually expect any future comments, I know you are on ‘holiday’ in Marmaris.  You made a thread about it and included pictures so it must be ‘true’.

I bet you are on the beach as I type this soaking up the sun in your adidas shorts and matching top complaining about the price of ice cream and shouting at your mother down the phone cos she topped up your giffgaff for you wrong.

All ‘sour grapes’ – of course!

• This reply was modified 5 years, 9 months ago by  Artful Dodger.

As much as Rose likes to diss…..LMAO