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Inside
Silence
At the slowly beating centre
Watching, assessing, judging, caring;
Outside
Desire, frustration, aggression, violence, pain.
Outside
Rain, wind, thunder,
Sunshine, grass, river.
Inside
At the slowly beating centre
Silence.
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You wrote that poem Sceptical Guy?
Yes, mister q
And quickly,
which is how I feel mizzy writes her poems.
At least I think she does.
Apart from a haiku a few years ago, also in jc, it’s the first I’ve written since I was 17 – I think.
Mizzy was pushing me for a while earlier this year, but I resisted,.
And then, for some unknown reason, i did it.
So I owe this to mizzy, though whether she cares or even notices is up to her.
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Thank you Scep, loved it x
Keep writing x
Always good to let your creativity flow
Yes sometimes I do write very quickly just to get it all out
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I’m very aware of the weaknesses of the poem, but at leat I wrote it.
A softly beating centre, for example, is hardly silence.
Twas a first draft. Maybe I’ll work on it.
I say you’re the inspiration, mizzy, because when you first started writing poems here, you said that writing by the rules of litcrit removed the whole point of writing a poem. That made an impression on me.
A couple of years ago there was a bout of poetry writing herd, and I was not happy with it. But instead of shutting up and letting people express themselves, I was hoity-toity and a bit of an ar**hole. Your comment prepared the way for me to try this.
Now I’m thinking of walking around with a smock, a wilting flower and a lecherous grin. They can’t arrest you for it if you’re a poet, can they??
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I’m very aware of the weaknesses of the poem, but at leat I wrote it. A softly beating centre, for example, is hardly silence. Twas a first draft. Maybe I’ll work on it. I say you’re the inspiration, mizzy, because when you first started writing poems here, you said that writing by the rules of litcrit removed the whole point of writing a poem. That made an impression on me. A couple of years ago there was a bout of poetry writing herd, and I was not happy with it. But instead of shutting up and letting people express themselves, I was hoity-toity and a bit of an ar**hole. Your comment prepared the way for me to try this. Now I’m thinking of walking around with a smock, a wilting flower and a lecherous grin. They can’t arrest you for it if you’re a poet, can they??
I took it that the beating was in your head like a pulse and the silence was outside where no one else could hear it.
My only pet hate is when people don’t make any sense for example things like
‘the shadow simmered like a kettle’ and stuff like that. I think everyone should write and not care if people put you down for it. I enjoy writing and I think you have talent – not that I would know I’m not a professional obviously. I would like to start my business back up but have zero motivation unfortunately. I hope to read more of your poetry soon :)
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I took it that the beating was in your head like a pulse and the silence was outside where no one else could hear it.
That’s interesting.
You read it more sharply than the author.
I put that line in because it sounded good, without thinking very clearly about it.
Then my litcrit mind got to work and wagged my finger at myself.
but you’re right. I think lol.
ya live and ya learn.
Looking forward to seeing more writings from you :)
i wrote a song about leaving the window open………it’s only a first draft at the moment………
Cor blimey they just keep coming lol
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