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I love it when you lie to me
You’re not fat my darling
You’re perfect as you are
And no your weights not messing
With the suspension of my car
You have inner beauty
That’s all that I can see
Your hairs not dry and stringy
You’re wonderful to me
And of course that colour suits you
You must wear orange every day
I’m sorry that man shouted “you’ve been tangoed”
Then drove away
And no I didn’t cheat on you
As we were on a break
She was young and slim and pretty
Obviously a huge mistake
Of course my dear my darling
I was thinking about you
She threw her nubile self at me
Now what’s a guy to do?
And yes I’m glad she dumped me
She wanted “friendship” that’s her word
And anyway my sweetheart
Who needs a dolly bird?
written around 2007
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HaHaHa! funny…weights not messing with the suspension of my car…lol great poem
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Thank you xx
im not to sure about the texture strength or the depth of this poem mizzy
while I admire your endeavours,why I said it plurally miz is for two reasons sadly ive just had the misfortune to read karmas attempt at a poem
and 2,i don’t appreciate you plagiarising one of my fave bands///yello
so may I suggest once again please go into deep discussions and negotiations with the drawing board.
well It was supposed to be a funny poem to make people laugh. Due to your comment I wont be posting up anything ever again. Also never heard of ‘yello’.
Cheers and FU
well It was supposed to be a funny poem to make people laugh. Due to your comment I wont be posting up anything ever again. Also never heard of ‘yello’. Cheers and FU
Mizzy, write more. I like your poems. You have a good stance.
However I do know that poets get really over-sensitive about criticism. If you put it online, then expect people to react to it differently. If there’s anything that you can take on board, take it. If not, then say FU, as you did, but letting criticism stop you posting the poems would be a shame.
I liked your fairytale poem best, but I don’t want to criticise it in case you get angry and don’t post any more of your poems. Which would be a shame.
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Hello Mizzy,
I enjoy the consistent flow of your poetry and your quirky style, which is fun and makes me smile. Don’t take any notice of the self proclaimed board “experts” and keep posting, they share nothing intimate of themselves with others because they are far to insecure and negative.
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GE – Yet another with an over inflated ego, and one of the most boring and insignificant people in JC.
GE – Yet another with an over inflated ego, and one of the most boring and insignificant people in JC.
Actually I am really interesting, a great conversationalist and tall and extremely handsome with a fantastic sense of humour. I might add, extremely modest as well. Don’t take it personal that I avoid flotsam like you, human debri, what would I have in common with people like you, whose whole life revolves around an online chatsite and constantly bitching about everyone else on it.
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Thank you both for your comments. I appreciate positive criticism. I do not believe that every single poem written should always contain ‘depth’, I often write hoping to amuse. It is a personal choice whether a person enjoys reading poetry about religion politics and other meaty topics. You can’t win them all. My poetry suits my personality, daft and not everyone’s cup of tea.
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