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1 March, 2006 at 1:06 am #3109
On a wintry cold moonlit night, on a island on a lake, stands a log cabin
were lovers meet and some moments of time need steal in order to be close.
A log fire cracks and blazes and its flames dances and the glow lights up the room.
and in front of the fire is a fur rug, so soft against bare skin, beside it on the
floor sits a bucket of ice, champagne within to chill, two glasses and the scene is set,
the rendezvous is made.On that rug a figure rests, stretched out so long and slender, with sculptured curves from the tip of her toes, to the top of her head, and in between ,a vision, a dream.
for this night she waits for her lover to arrive, but its getting late and her eyelids flicker and she tries to keep awake but her eyelids win and closes her eyes and soon to sleep surrenders.You feel a gentle hand upon your face and brushes the hair from your eyes, you feel my lips searching for yours, and eagerly respond, tasting and you let out little sighs and the flames they dance in the fire and the glow lights up the room
From the touch of you face, I run my hand down to the small of your back, and pull you closer to me, I kiss your neck and nibble and bite as my lips move down further, on your naked breast
I lick and suck and draw little circles with my tongue. and the flames they dance in the fire and the glow lights up the room
and still I move down further, I draw a trail to your beautiful navel and this I have to kiss and I fell your hands one on each shoulder and they push me down further, and the flames they dance in the fire and the glow lights up the room.shall I stop , i hope I didn’t make you blush, no I retract that,a beautiful woman should always be made to blush a little. I dont mean that in a bad way,for you sometimes forget just how beautiful you really are.
and the powers that you evoke.1 March, 2006 at 8:08 am #200192Lovely……made me wish I was there! :)
1 March, 2006 at 8:47 am #200193
Very sensual ,I shall be looking for part two-William :) :)1 March, 2006 at 10:50 am #200194
Touchit, very sensual and hot! I can’t wait until you post part 2!Angelwolf
1 March, 2006 at 3:08 pm #200195I prefer the Basement Jaxx version :P
It doesn’t seem to have been edited or even proofread, which is sinful in prose writing. It reads to me like a bad attempt at virginal erotica.
Sorry but… where is the passion, where aren’t the cliches? There isn’t even a vivid scene-setting of this most traditional tryst to enjoy.
The one bit I liked was about it being ok sometimes to make beautiful women blush, but otherwise…
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1 March, 2006 at 4:26 pm #200196O K cculture point taken ,now when you have finished talking to yourself in the mirror, tell me what you think of the writing and don’t beat about the bush
come straight out with it.
and hey its only fun, don’t take it to seriously,
now deep breaths, breath in, breath out, count to ten. breath in, breath out.lol.G.
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